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Gazal

 बहुत पहले से हम बातिल हुए हैं गये गुज़रों में अब शामिल हुए हैं हमारे शहर ने हम को ना माना तभी जंगल में हम दाखिल हुए हैं अजब मजबूरियों से घिर गए थे जनाब आप उस सबब कामिल हुए हैं   चले आओ हमारा दिल बड़ा है अगर्चे आप अब क़ातिल हुए हैं अभी कितनी बची है धूप बाकी सफ़ीने भी सू-ए-साहिल हुए हैं अभी तक बन चुका होगा समंदर सराबा~ जिस में ग़म शामिल हुए हैं Critique This ghazal announces its own erasure before it even begins. _Bahut pehle se hum baatil hue hain / gaye guzron me ab shaamil hue hain_ is not a metaphor for sadness, it is a status report. The speaker counts himself among the departed while still speaking. That first declaration sets the temperature for everything that follows. There is no hope of recovery here, only the inventory of what was lost. The second couplet gives that erasure a location. _Humaare shehar ne hum ko na maana / tabhi jungle me hum daakhil hue hain_. The city’s refusal is stated as fact, not complaint. The jungle is not freedom, it is the place you go ...
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Ghazal, about ghazal

شَاہِی بُلَندِی سے اُتَر آئی غَزَل بَازَار کی نَظَر میں بَھر آئی غَزَل لوگوں تَوَجُّہ دو وُہی شِعر سُنو یِہ ہے وُہی اَزَل سے پُرَانِی غَزَل دیکھو وُہی مِزَاج سَلِیقَہ وُہی یِہ نَاگُزِیر اور لَاثَانِی غَزَل اُٹھ کے سَراب سے نِکَل آئی غَزَل جَنَّت کی رَانِی پیَار کی پیَاسِی غَغَزَ Transliteration: Shāhee bulandi se utar āyī Gazal Bāzār kī nazar mey bhar āyī Gazal Logõn tavajjo do vo hi shér suno Yé hai vo hi azal se purāni Gazal Dekho vahi mizāj salīqā vahī yé na-Guzīr aur lāsānī Gazal uTh ké sarāb se nikal āyî Gazal Jannat ki rāni pyār ki pyāsi Gazal
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Ghazal & her implications

Note :  The Ghazal is in Devnagri.  Each shér is accompanied with transliteration, for pronunciation.  Then we have the AI generated critical appreciation. It is unbiased as far as my command then prompted it.  And finally, we have the whole Ghazal in English translation, more to give that reader who is not familiar with ghazal, the drift of the ash'ar than to reproduce it in English.  Hope You like it. Enjoy!  🌹 मुझ को अच्छे काम की दाद पर शक होता है, मैं हुआ नाकाम इस बात पर शक होता है। Mujh ko achhe kaam ki daad par shak hota hai, Main hua nakaam is baat par shak hota hai. आग उगलता है समा जल गया मेरा मकां, जल रहा सूरज मगर रात पर शक होता है। Aag ugalta hai sama jal gaya mera makaan, Jal raha sooraj magar raat par shak hota hai.    आंख गिरती है जिधर पर्दा दारी है वहां, दुनिया के बाज़ार, हर मेले पर शक होता है । Aankh girti hai jidhar parda-daari hai wahaan, Duniya ke baazaar, har mélé par shak hota hai. जो सियासत दान हैं ये उन्हीं की नस्ल है, लाल ब...
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Opening a Shér

  मैं सोता कहाँ सोया हुआ लगता हूँ कहता हूँ कुछ तो बकता हुआ लगता हूँ (This shér (matla) is of Saraab Goany )  These lines capture a profound existential crisis and a deep sense of self-alienation.  The first line presents a psychological paradox where the boundary between sleep and wakefulness is blurred. It suggests a state of emotional numbness or depression, where you feel disconnected from reality even when you are fully conscious. The second line shifts the focus to a crisis of expression and communication. It reflects a total loss of confidence in your own voice, where your thoughts feel meaningless or detached from your internal truth. By describing your own speech as mere babbling, you highlight a breakdown in connecting with both yourself and the world around you. The poetic craft relies on simple, conversational language to deliver a heavy psychological weight. This contrast between everyday words and intense inner turmoil creates a powerful, relatable image of m...
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